Abstract of the book "The Right to Love"
It was a cruel twist of fate that brought them together at the Games for the Crown. But before she could fully grasp the impossible reality, he was gone again, a fleeting promise lost to the chaos of the arena. Their love was a constant fight, a relentless cycle of finding and losing. It seemed as cursed as he was. But they never gave up. Now, with the highest power in the land—the crown—standing as their final and greatest obstacle, can their love finally triumph?
62 comments
olena-vereschaka17.04.2025, 10:19A bit lacking in the development of some chapters. It's unclear what happened to Darten after the main character pushed him away, whether the pale one was still him or not. Because everything changed very abruptly. They were chasing that Elizabeth, but in the end, we never found out what happened to her, what was in those basements about her, and why she lured them there like into a trap. And at the end, to the question "How?" there was a strange, unclear answer "you are our only queen," how does that explain the question "How?" and what does the infinity symbol have to do with it? An interesting story, but it feels a bit raw.
sofiia-viterec18.04.2025, 23:28Olena Vereschaka, Try reading this scene again) Everything is clearly visible there - the illusions did their job)) And a little spoiler for those who decide to start reading the book from its comments - Elizabeth is the ghost of Anabelle's relative. It’s at that moment, when the main character learns about her and her story, that she begins to understand her main duty - not to let them seize power in the kingdom) Honestly, the author always has a lot going on in their head, but when you read it, everything comes together)) To be honest, it’s been a year since the book was written, and even I’ve forgotten the plot - but when you read it, everything falls into place)) Thank you)
iarina25.11.2024, 17:09In terms of feeling, this chapter and the previous one seem like they could be merged into one. There’s a setup, a few hooks are scattered around. By the fifth chapter, I’d like to see more development of the main heroine. There’s a lack of the main hook — a clear understanding of her motivation and goal. Because right now, all those games for the throne are somewhere in the background of her relationship with Darten, even though they seem to be the main focus. Or maybe I don’t quite understand the main character? Wishing you success :) P.S. Darten turned out to be quite sweet :)
sofiia-viterec18.04.2025, 23:17Yaryna, there’s a little bit) But it would be somewhat inappropriate - after all, night is coming, and starting the next paragraph in the morning feels a bit out of place)) Regarding motivation, the heroine simply couldn’t refuse the invitation to participate in the games, and the support of the people and everyone around her gave her those same emotions when she realized she couldn’t do otherwise. A bit later, this is better revealed, and the main hook appears - why and for what reason she should be the queen)) I love creating sweet main characters)) Many readers won’t understand me, but let them) Thank you so much for the support and advice)))
- iarina25.11.2024, 17:02
Honestly, this chapter really lacks descriptions, actions, and locations. There are a lot of dialogues, and on top of that, new characters are introduced. It's hard to get through the text and understand what's happening. Especially after the pleasant slow pace of the previous chapter.
sofiia-viterec18.04.2025, 23:12Yaryna, I tried to convey that same suddenness, so characteristic of films where we sometimes don’t even know the names of the main characters, and the focus is purely on them moving forward) Honestly, I don’t like a slow pace)) But I’ll take it into account) And when I return to improving the book, which I will definitely do someday, I’ll certainly consider your words)
- iarina25.11.2024, 16:20
I really liked the fisherman. There's so little of him, but despite that, he's so colorful. His dialogue with the duchess was interesting.
sofiia-viterec18.04.2025, 23:10Yaryna, Sorry, I just saw your comment) Thank you so much)) I love introducing interesting characters who have lived through a lot and possess life wisdom, which they are happy to share with the characters in the book)
- iarina12.11.2024, 16:29
Greetings for mutual reading. I must note right away that the genre of the work is completely not my thing; I rarely read texts with a romantic storyline, so I can’t fully evaluate it. The dynamic beginning is good; it immediately sets the pace and makes it clear in what space and under what conditions the characters are. I was a bit surprised that the MC didn’t know Darten; at the start, it felt like they had known each other for a long time, but maybe that’s intentional. I really missed a more detailed description of the fishermen’s catch + it’s unclear what size the boat is, because if the MC stood up abruptly in it, it’s unlikely it would stay stable. I hope in the next chapters there will be a bit more backstory about this game and the world’s magic, because there are already some intriguing hints, and I’m curious to read what’s next. As for advice: break sentences into shorter ones and use fewer participial phrases, because stylistically, the text is hard to read, and the dynamics get lost because of it.
sofiia-viterec12.11.2024, 19:52Yaryna, I'm glad you're staying after all))) Actually, the plot will give you the answer to your initial "surprise"). As for the catching, I'll think about it some more) But a standard fishing boat for four people won't tip over from such movement, no problem) I say this as someone who has tested it personally during my active use of this transport))) Thanks for the advice))) They are very helpful) But the expressions - they are my second soul))) Where would I be without them)))
rada-lia10.10.2024, 14:22I liked the complex world-building and the interesting plot. I'm also quite curious about what will happen next, as the story itself has a lot of potential and opportunities for development. However, I felt there was a bit of a lack of action and gripping twists that would hold my attention. The characters' emotions don't seem convincing enough. It feels like there isn't enough evidence for why these feelings emerged. Still, as I mentioned, the story itself is interesting. Just add a bit of vivid color, and everything will be great :)
sofiia-viterec10.10.2024, 15:32Rada Lia, Thank you very much))) It's nice to hear such words))) Actually, this is just a draft for now, and I plan to refine every single paragraph) I will definitely take your words into account)
anni-ksandr03.09.2024, 08:56Where Ayrask kissed her, you wrote Darten)) I knew that troll in the video wasn’t there for no reason))) But it’s even kind of creepy)) Will he stay like this, or will it be like in Beauty and the Beast?)))
sofiia-viterec03.09.2024, 13:36Anni Ksandr, Anything is possible)))
loiko-samum31.08.2024, 23:30Greetings from mutual reading! So far, I've only read a few chapters, and here's what I can say: the text is easy to read, but there is a lack of descriptions of the characters and the magical world in general. Perhaps this is addressed in later chapters. Due to the absence of descriptions of your magical world, the story feels similar to other books. At the beginning of the story, I got the impression that there is some kind of prequel, and this is just a continuation. The text reads easily, but the dialogues, which are too many in a row, are confusing. It's hard to keep track of who is speaking. Overall, the story is interesting, and I hope it will continue to be so. Thank you for your creativity, and I wish you inspiration!
sofiia-viterec01.09.2024, 11:22Loiko Samum, Hello) Regarding the descriptions - I will still improve)) For this book, editing is still planned, focusing mostly on the descriptions) As for the dialogues - only two people are speaking, and I add the emotions of the speakers almost after every line, so I slightly disagree with you here))) If not the name, then the address or the speaker's emotions will hint at who it is) Overall, thank you very much))) Especially for the comment about the descriptions) This is very important to me ❤️
- anni-ksandr26.08.2024, 08:45
Got confused with this Erion)) Is Cormelion in him or in Araiske?)))
sofiia-viterec26.08.2024, 18:24Anni Ksandr, For now, it's a secret))) it won't be as interesting otherwise)
lydmila24.08.2024, 22:24Because from the first meeting, Your Highness, the boy liked you.
sofiia-viterec24.08.2024, 23:07Lydmila, Soon you will see if it's mutual or not))
- lydmila24.08.2024, 22:16
Having a mother as not just a friend, but a good companion in such a trial is a good thing.
sofiia-viterec24.08.2024, 23:06Lydmila, Oh yes)) Help is never unnecessary, especially on the path to the throne)
- anni-ksandr24.08.2024, 09:49
Don't tell me he's in the bracelet...
sofiia-viterec24.08.2024, 12:42Anni Ksandr, At first, I didn’t even understand what you were talking about))) I didn’t even think of such a turn of events)))
- anni-ksandr22.08.2024, 17:46
Hmm, what was the point of this tree challenge? Because I'm a bit confused))
sofiia-viterec22.08.2024, 22:30Anni Ksandr, I can, I know, I practice))))
- anni-ksandr20.08.2024, 10:40
The current Darten is "the epitome of gallantry"))) Is he not afraid of the consequences?))
sofiia-viterec20.08.2024, 12:02Anni Ksandr, he shouldn't))) He deserved it)))
- anni-ksandr19.08.2024, 22:22
Now I'm also curious about where Darten really disappeared to...
The Right to Love
About the book
It was a cruel twist of fate that brought them together at the Games for the Crown. But before she could fully grasp the impossible reality, he was gone again, a fleeting promise lost to the chaos of the arena. Their love was a constant fight, a relentless cycle of finding and losing. It seemed as cursed as he was. But they never gave up. Now, with the highest power in the land—the crown—standing as their final and greatest obstacle, can their love finally triumph?
62 comments
- olena-vereschaka17.04.2025, 10:19
A bit lacking in the development of some chapters. It's unclear what happened to Darten after the main character pushed him away, whether the pale one was still him or not. Because everything changed very abruptly. They were chasing that Elizabeth, but in the end, we never found out what happened to her, what was in those basements about her, and why she lured them there like into a trap. And at the end, to the question "How?" there was a strange, unclear answer "you are our only queen," how does that explain the question "How?" and what does the infinity symbol have to do with it? An interesting story, but it feels a bit raw.
sofiia-viterec18.04.2025, 23:28Olena Vereschaka, Try reading this scene again) Everything is clearly visible there - the illusions did their job)) And a little spoiler for those who decide to start reading the book from its comments - Elizabeth is the ghost of Anabelle's relative. It’s at that moment, when the main character learns about her and her story, that she begins to understand her main duty - not to let them seize power in the kingdom) Honestly, the author always has a lot going on in their head, but when you read it, everything comes together)) To be honest, it’s been a year since the book was written, and even I’ve forgotten the plot - but when you read it, everything falls into place)) Thank you)
- iarina25.11.2024, 17:09
In terms of feeling, this chapter and the previous one seem like they could be merged into one. There’s a setup, a few hooks are scattered around. By the fifth chapter, I’d like to see more development of the main heroine. There’s a lack of the main hook — a clear understanding of her motivation and goal. Because right now, all those games for the throne are somewhere in the background of her relationship with Darten, even though they seem to be the main focus. Or maybe I don’t quite understand the main character? Wishing you success :) P.S. Darten turned out to be quite sweet :)
sofiia-viterec18.04.2025, 23:17Yaryna, there’s a little bit) But it would be somewhat inappropriate - after all, night is coming, and starting the next paragraph in the morning feels a bit out of place)) Regarding motivation, the heroine simply couldn’t refuse the invitation to participate in the games, and the support of the people and everyone around her gave her those same emotions when she realized she couldn’t do otherwise. A bit later, this is better revealed, and the main hook appears - why and for what reason she should be the queen)) I love creating sweet main characters)) Many readers won’t understand me, but let them) Thank you so much for the support and advice)))
- iarina25.11.2024, 17:02
Honestly, this chapter really lacks descriptions, actions, and locations. There are a lot of dialogues, and on top of that, new characters are introduced. It's hard to get through the text and understand what's happening. Especially after the pleasant slow pace of the previous chapter.
sofiia-viterec18.04.2025, 23:12Yaryna, I tried to convey that same suddenness, so characteristic of films where we sometimes don’t even know the names of the main characters, and the focus is purely on them moving forward) Honestly, I don’t like a slow pace)) But I’ll take it into account) And when I return to improving the book, which I will definitely do someday, I’ll certainly consider your words)
- iarina25.11.2024, 16:20
I really liked the fisherman. There's so little of him, but despite that, he's so colorful. His dialogue with the duchess was interesting.
sofiia-viterec18.04.2025, 23:10Yaryna, Sorry, I just saw your comment) Thank you so much)) I love introducing interesting characters who have lived through a lot and possess life wisdom, which they are happy to share with the characters in the book)
- iarina12.11.2024, 16:29
Greetings for mutual reading. I must note right away that the genre of the work is completely not my thing; I rarely read texts with a romantic storyline, so I can’t fully evaluate it. The dynamic beginning is good; it immediately sets the pace and makes it clear in what space and under what conditions the characters are. I was a bit surprised that the MC didn’t know Darten; at the start, it felt like they had known each other for a long time, but maybe that’s intentional. I really missed a more detailed description of the fishermen’s catch + it’s unclear what size the boat is, because if the MC stood up abruptly in it, it’s unlikely it would stay stable. I hope in the next chapters there will be a bit more backstory about this game and the world’s magic, because there are already some intriguing hints, and I’m curious to read what’s next. As for advice: break sentences into shorter ones and use fewer participial phrases, because stylistically, the text is hard to read, and the dynamics get lost because of it.
sofiia-viterec12.11.2024, 19:52Yaryna, I'm glad you're staying after all))) Actually, the plot will give you the answer to your initial "surprise"). As for the catching, I'll think about it some more) But a standard fishing boat for four people won't tip over from such movement, no problem) I say this as someone who has tested it personally during my active use of this transport))) Thanks for the advice))) They are very helpful) But the expressions - they are my second soul))) Where would I be without them)))
- rada-lia10.10.2024, 14:22
I liked the complex world-building and the interesting plot. I'm also quite curious about what will happen next, as the story itself has a lot of potential and opportunities for development. However, I felt there was a bit of a lack of action and gripping twists that would hold my attention. The characters' emotions don't seem convincing enough. It feels like there isn't enough evidence for why these feelings emerged. Still, as I mentioned, the story itself is interesting. Just add a bit of vivid color, and everything will be great :)
sofiia-viterec10.10.2024, 15:32Rada Lia, Thank you very much))) It's nice to hear such words))) Actually, this is just a draft for now, and I plan to refine every single paragraph) I will definitely take your words into account)
- anni-ksandr03.09.2024, 08:56
Where Ayrask kissed her, you wrote Darten)) I knew that troll in the video wasn’t there for no reason))) But it’s even kind of creepy)) Will he stay like this, or will it be like in Beauty and the Beast?)))
sofiia-viterec03.09.2024, 13:36Anni Ksandr, Anything is possible)))
- loiko-samum31.08.2024, 23:30
Greetings from mutual reading! So far, I've only read a few chapters, and here's what I can say: the text is easy to read, but there is a lack of descriptions of the characters and the magical world in general. Perhaps this is addressed in later chapters. Due to the absence of descriptions of your magical world, the story feels similar to other books. At the beginning of the story, I got the impression that there is some kind of prequel, and this is just a continuation. The text reads easily, but the dialogues, which are too many in a row, are confusing. It's hard to keep track of who is speaking. Overall, the story is interesting, and I hope it will continue to be so. Thank you for your creativity, and I wish you inspiration!
sofiia-viterec01.09.2024, 11:22Loiko Samum, Hello) Regarding the descriptions - I will still improve)) For this book, editing is still planned, focusing mostly on the descriptions) As for the dialogues - only two people are speaking, and I add the emotions of the speakers almost after every line, so I slightly disagree with you here))) If not the name, then the address or the speaker's emotions will hint at who it is) Overall, thank you very much))) Especially for the comment about the descriptions) This is very important to me ❤️
- anni-ksandr26.08.2024, 08:45
Got confused with this Erion)) Is Cormelion in him or in Araiske?)))
sofiia-viterec26.08.2024, 18:24Anni Ksandr, For now, it's a secret))) it won't be as interesting otherwise)
- lydmila24.08.2024, 22:24
Because from the first meeting, Your Highness, the boy liked you.
sofiia-viterec24.08.2024, 23:07Lydmila, Soon you will see if it's mutual or not))
- lydmila24.08.2024, 22:16
Having a mother as not just a friend, but a good companion in such a trial is a good thing.
sofiia-viterec24.08.2024, 23:06Lydmila, Oh yes)) Help is never unnecessary, especially on the path to the throne)
- anni-ksandr24.08.2024, 09:49
Don't tell me he's in the bracelet...
sofiia-viterec24.08.2024, 12:42Anni Ksandr, At first, I didn’t even understand what you were talking about))) I didn’t even think of such a turn of events)))
- anni-ksandr22.08.2024, 17:46
Hmm, what was the point of this tree challenge? Because I'm a bit confused))
sofiia-viterec22.08.2024, 22:30Anni Ksandr, I can, I know, I practice))))
- anni-ksandr20.08.2024, 10:40
The current Darten is "the epitome of gallantry"))) Is he not afraid of the consequences?))
sofiia-viterec20.08.2024, 12:02Anni Ksandr, he shouldn't))) He deserved it)))
- anni-ksandr19.08.2024, 22:22
Now I'm also curious about where Darten really disappeared to...